Workshop Reflection

What advice did you receive from each member of your group? Explain each person’s advice separately and be specific.
Rachel told me to correct some grammar in the dialogue so that the flow of the play would go smoothly. She also told me to change the subject of my question to students in general because it is hard to address African Americans. She also suggested that I try to find another source to show some type of contrast or another opinion that would oppose what these authors are claiming. Brian told me that the structure and the story line of my dialogue was good. Since the tone was mostly formal, I should be consistent and not include slang unless I change the whole tone of my dialogue. He also said to make the dialogue sound like something my characters would say. He said that I go from regular conversation into factual information that doesn't flow. They both suggested that I change tryna to tryin' and to put the source's information in my own words.

What was the most helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.
The most helpful advice was to be consistent in my dialogue as far as grammar and the way the characters speak to each other (informal or formal). The dialogue would flow more smoothly if I didn't jump to a different style of speech. I am going to be informal in the dialogue then, I should keep it that way throughout the play.

What was the least helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.
The least helpful piece of advice was changing tryna to tryin'. It is not important as the content of my dialogue so it may be overlooked when proofreading or revising. I mean I can change it but I don't see how it would affect the dialogue as a whole.

What are your plans for revision? Be specific. I should be able to understand exactly how your work will change in exactly which places.
I will revise the dialogue so that the style of speech is consistent throughout the play. I will summarize the technical information to put it in my own words as if I was really having a conversation with the other people. My sources really address students in general instead of African Americans so I think that changing my focus to students will allow me to get into depth more throughout my inquiry process.