1.What advice did you receive from each member of
your group? Explain each person’s advice
separately and be specific.
Well I was split up into another
group so I got advice from people outside of my inquiry group. Blair told me
that in second source to add some examples of some of the negative stereotypes
to support the claim I am trying to claim. In my third source, she advises me
to get more into depth about how the author presents her research. Danielle suggests
that I tell about the students’ reactions to music and fix minor errors like
finishing a sentence. She also points out that I have placed a quote inside a
quote which requires a different citation and that I need a hanging indent for
my source if I am using MLA format. Instead of saying the author “talks about”
she said I should say the author “explains” to make it sound more academic.
Danielle also told me to give subjects and scenarios of how “meaningless lyric and
catchy beats” affect students. Calvin told me that I should not use first
person in the analytical paragraph but instead I should analyze how well the
author did. He also said to try not to repeat sentence starters (She…. She…)
instead (She… The author…). I don’t remember what the other boy’s name was in
that group but he told me that I should not use “I” in my analysis paragraph. I
should use “The reader” or “One” to exclude my own personal opinion. While
excluding my opinion, I should tell whether I agree or disagree with the author.
- What was the most helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.
The most helpful piece
of advice came to me collectively as a group. Majority of the group told me to
fix my analysis paragraph on my first source. They just asked me to provide
more in depth about what is going on and to try not to summarize the source
like I did in my first paragraph. They asked me to provide more examples and
things that the author is trying to say in the source.
- What was the least helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.
The least helpful
piece of advice or the least important piece of advice was the grammatical corrections
like the hanging indent or the missing words. I accept the mistakes I made but
they are not as important as the content that needs to be fixed.
- What are your plans for revision? Be specific. I should be able to understand exactly how your work will change in exactly which places.
I, first, have to fix and add to
my analytical paragraph. I need more examples and I need to talk in reference
to the author and not from my opinion. I need to proofread my work to check for
grammatical errors and other writing errors. I will fix my in-text citations to
avoid plagiarism.
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