Sunday, March 31, 2013

Annotated Bibilography (Sources 1-5)


Works Cited
Lee, Sharon. “The Effects Of Music On Student Psychology.” Online Submission (2011): ERIC Web. 24 Mar. 2013.

In this article, the author is explaining how music affects us as we go about our daily lives. Music is an important part of our culture and it can influence some of the decisions that make regarding our everyday routines, especially those of students in school. The author argues that the different types of music can cause different reactions in students whether they are good or bad. She also argues that the music can be beneficial to a student as well as distracting when trying to complete tasks. Throughout the article, Lee gives examples of studies where music is introduced in the classrooms and analyzed the results of students’ performance with music.
Sharon Lee conducts several tests and analyzes the physical, social, and psychological effects of music on students in school. She is trying to get the reader to understand the technical processes that happen within the body that allows a person, a student in this case, to act a certain way under the influence of music. Lee discusses how the psychological processes are mostly affected because of how the music manipulates their mood. And once the mood is altered then one’s actions or course of action may change. Sometimes we cannot even control the way music makes us feel or react.
. I am looking for research in which I find out whether the lyrical content as well as the beat of the music contributes to the performance of a student in school especially in African American students. I will use this source to lay the foundation of my research. I will first find out how music affects the body and the mind before I find out how it can influence a student to do something that a stereotype suggests. This article goes into detail about brain waves and arousal levels that give me a bit of background knowledge that will help me better understand how music really affects adolescents in school. The article tells me about music and psychological processes that are being affected by music especially in our culture and society today.
·       “In an 1991 article, Giles states that Intervention programs for children at risk could use music to help them relax, build their self-esteem, and help them with their emotional problems” (3).
·       “Adolescents naturally seem to use music to monitor and manipulate mood, motivation, and task completion, but understanding the effects of music could enable them to make appropriate decision” (1).
·       “Also important are the effects of music we do not choose, but are subjected through our environment choices such as restaurants and stores” (1).


(ED) Regional Educational Laboratory Southeast, et al. "Reducing Stereotype Threat In Classrooms: A Review Of Social-Psychological Intervention Studies On Improving The Achievement Of Black Students. Issues & Answers. REL 2009-076." Regional Educational Laboratory Southeast (2009): ERIC. Web. 24 Mar. 2013.

In this report, the authors discuss the threat that stereotypes have on Black students and how these stereotypes affect their intellectual ability in school. They have conducted research and have come up with strategies to reduce this threat as well as narrow the achievement gap between White and Black students. Some students feel that because a stereotype says that they perform lower than the nonminority students, they have a fear of failing and living up to that stereotype. This report is trying to fix this issue by introducing social psychological interventions to reduce stereotype threat while increasing Black students’ academic ability.
Most minority students, especially Black students are aware of the stereotypes of their culture, so in knowing that they may not be able perform to the best of their ability because they will have that pressure on them not to support that stereotype. With all this pressure on the students, it can take a toll on their performance in the classroom. The authors and researchers are conducting studies that will find ways to reduce the stress of negatively reinforced stereotypes. Since the Black racial group faces many negative stereotypes already, it is hard to not focus on those while trying to perform at the best of their ability along side of the rest of society reinforcing them as well.
I chose this report because this tells about stereotypes presented in the classroom of Black students. I need to know how these minority students are viewed before I can assess how other factors play into why they are viewed this way. There are charts and other forms of data that will help support my claim or answer my question.
·       “Stereotype threat arises from a fear among members of a group of reinforcing negative stereotypes about the intellectual ability of the group” (1).
·       “In a society where economic opportunity depends heavily on scholastic success, even a partial narrowing of the achievement gap would lead to a positive change in the lives of academically at-risk children” (1).
·       “It was hypothesized that Black students in this condition would worry that performing poorly could confirm a stereotype about their racial group’s intellectual ability” (2).


Brown, Veda. "Guiding The Influence Of Hip-Hop Music On Middle-School Students' Feelings, Thinking, And Behaving." Negro Educational Review, The 57.1-2 (2006): 49-68. ERIC. Web. 25 Mar. 2013.

The article discusses how hip hop music affects middle-school students’ psychological being and how teachers can use the consumption of hip hop to help in the academic field as well as in the classroom. Brown talks about how adolescents follow trends introduced through music and shows how they are greatly influenced by this music. She asks questions as to why they are so easily influenced by the music industry and why they are targeted for this type of market. She goes into detail about what exactly about the music appeals to these students and what emotions or behaviors this evokes. They hope to take these same types of appeal from music and implement them in the classroom setting.
Veda Brown breaks down her research into a couple points. She wants to explore how motivational music is to the middle school students, how the music appeals to them (ie. marketing strategies), and how the teachers and parents of these students can use these strategies to make learning appealing to students. She wants to see how meaningless lyrics and catchy beats affect the students’ behavior in the way they approach subjects or scenarios and why they take to them. Most of the middle school children listen to hip hop or just music in general to evoke emotion or as a form of release to life’s problems.
This article will help me in my inquiry paper because it focuses on the mind of students and how it affects their behavior and psychological status. It also focuses on a specific group of students; I’m not sure of what ethnic group but I am assuming African American students because they mention hip hop. I am using the information found in this article to prove or to illustrate how music and the how the rhetoric in music can change or significantly affect a student in the academic field and why this happens.
·       “Adolescents' attitudes about school, material success, appreciation of themselves and others seem to be shaped to a large extent by the music they listen to” (49).
·       “Well meaning adults have often complained that the popular music of today seems to have a detrimental effect on children's thought and subsequent behavioral patterns. Particularly, many adults believe that the lyrics of some celebrated musical artists such as Fifty-Cent, Nelly, Foxy Brown, Marilyn Manson, Lil' Kim, and Eminem have often undercut the very attributes, skills, and values of emotional intelligence that form the basis for pro-social behavior”(51).
·       “In contrast, children who lack pro-social skills associated with stable emotional intelligence tend to be easily influenced by various environmental factors such as peers and media. Some adults believe that this emotional weakness in children may leave them vulnerable to ideas of violence, sexual promiscuity, and other forms of anti-social behavior that are often portrayed in some popular hip-hop songs and videos”(51).

Hagood, Margaret C, Donna E. Alvermann, and Alison Heron-Hruby. Bring It to Class: Unpacking Pop Culture in Literacy Learning. New York: Teachers College Press, 2010. Print.

            This book is about how pop culture introduced in the classrooms can be beneficial to the students and the teachers who are using pop culture texts or materials in their instruction. It also discusses research that was conducted to find out how pop culture can connect to the student’s identities, social networks, belief systems, and their literacy learning. This book is serving somewhat as a guide to other teachers and those in the profession of education who want to try to get through to students as far as learning new material or connecting to the pop culture of modern day.
            From the perspective of the reader, the authors writes this book to help steer teachers, whether they are new teachers or experienced, to assess how much text is used by different types of people in different fields. The authors write from different points of view and show how the “textual” day changes for everyone. By finding out how much text is used or not used, you can then assess how the students are being influenced by other sources of information and then incorporate that in educational practices.
            I chose this book because it gives a different viewpoint other than what the students think. It shows what the teachers think and how this study can help them assess how students learn with the accompaniment of pop culture (music, social media, tv, etc).
·       “They also include pop culture texts, which are mass-generated print and nonprint texts (e.g., comics, anime, TV shows,  movies, videos, young adult books, music lyrics) that use multiple modes (e.g., linguistic, visual, aural, performative) to entice audiences to use them” (2).
·       “While some educators easily incorporate pop culture texts into instruction, others find it difficult because pop culture texts often fall outside the definition of textual practices used at school” (3).
·       “The challenge for educators is to determine how pop culture is connected to, addressed, included, and excluded in classrooms. Instruction must provide opportunities for students to think critically and to develop their facility with 21st-century texts” (26).
Hill, Marc L. Beats, Rhymes, and Classroom Life: Hip-hop Pedagogy and the Politics of Identity. New York: Teachers College Press, 2009. Print.
           
            This book discusses how a hip-hop culture will enhance the curriculum and tells the results of what happens when you bring hip hop into the classroom. Teachers integrate hip hop and literature to learn about how a student learns. They are trying to find out if this type of pop culture will improve the students’ motivation, critical thinking and media literacy in schools. Also they want to know if introducing this type of music to urban youth will make learning more favorable and appealing to them.
             The author explains that in the urban youth areas, these students are around hip-hop a lot and it appeals to them. Hill wants to use take something in pop culture that appeals to the students and apply that to education to see if that will appeal to them as well. He tells about an instructor who combines the two and teaches a Hip Hop Lit course to test this notion that he has. Throughout this course, he sees the different identities that emerge from the students taking this course.
            I chose this book because it directly integrates music and the hip hop culture that African Americans are familiar with and it shows how it affects students of this race in education.
·       “Given the salience of hip-hop culture in the lives of many urban American youth, the educational community has begun to pay considerable attention to the pedagogical possibilities of hip-hop culture within formal schooling contexts” (2).
·       “In particular, scholars have shown how the elements of hip-hop and other forms of popular culture—rap music, turn-tablism, break dancing, graffiti culture, fashion, and language—can be used within classrooms to improve students motivation, teach critical media literacy, foster critical consciousness, and transmit disciplinary knowledge” (2).
·       As a result, scholars gained considerable insight into the extent to which hip-hop “does” things to young people, yet very little was learned about the motivations, processes, or nonclinical consequences of youth engagements with hip-hop” (4).






Self Assessment Reflection


My goals were to get an answer to my inquiry question through research and finding sources to answer or support that claim. For the paper, my goal was to inform someone about the effects of stereotypes in movies and music on Black students in education in the real world. I am somewhat close to reaching my goals but I have to close it up by connecting all of my sources to answer my question and show to my readers what I was trying to inquire about.I was struggling with time on developing this paper because of my busy schedule with the basketball team. I really liked the fact that I got to workshop my drafts in class and got to see what my peers thought of my work and what I could improve on or need to change. During class time, I could really focus on the task at time because the distractions were at a minor.I see that my writing is changing gradually because I am starting to get out of that traditional form of writing in a set structure. I am able to organize my writing but not writing in "blocks". I appreciate the help I received from Megan and the inquiry groups i was apart of who helped me out during workshops. As I progress, I learned that I am getting better at organizing my thoughts and I am getting better at analyzing what the author wants the reader to know form reading their work. The hardest part of this paper was trying to find sources that connect with one another to answer one main question. My paper is and informational paper so there is no back-and-forth of opinions through the texts so I decided to build my answer with foundational text that leads into what my inquiry question is asking.


Workshop Reflection


1.What advice did you receive from each member of your group?  Explain each person’s advice separately and be specific.

Well I was split up into another group so I got advice from people outside of my inquiry group. Blair told me that in second source to add some examples of some of the negative stereotypes to support the claim I am trying to claim. In my third source, she advises me to get more into depth about how the author presents her research. Danielle suggests that I tell about the students’ reactions to music and fix minor errors like finishing a sentence. She also points out that I have placed a quote inside a quote which requires a different citation and that I need a hanging indent for my source if I am using MLA format. Instead of saying the author “talks about” she said I should say the author “explains” to make it sound more academic. Danielle also told me to give subjects and scenarios of how “meaningless lyric and catchy beats” affect students. Calvin told me that I should not use first person in the analytical paragraph but instead I should analyze how well the author did. He also said to try not to repeat sentence starters (She…. She…) instead (She… The author…). I don’t remember what the other boy’s name was in that group but he told me that I should not use “I” in my analysis paragraph. I should use “The reader” or “One” to exclude my own personal opinion. While excluding my opinion, I should tell whether I agree or disagree with the author.

  1. What was the most helpful piece of advice you received? Explain. 
The most helpful piece of advice came to me collectively as a group. Majority of the group told me to fix my analysis paragraph on my first source. They just asked me to provide more in depth about what is going on and to try not to summarize the source like I did in my first paragraph. They asked me to provide more examples and things that the author is trying to say in the source.

  1. What was the least helpful piece of advice you received?  Explain. 
The least helpful piece of advice or the least important piece of advice was the grammatical corrections like the hanging indent or the missing words. I accept the mistakes I made but they are not as important as the content that needs to be fixed.

  1. What are your plans for revision?  Be specific.  I should be able to understand exactly how your work will change in exactly which places.
I, first, have to fix and add to my analytical paragraph. I need more examples and I need to talk in reference to the author and not from my opinion. I need to proofread my work to check for grammatical errors and other writing errors. I will fix my in-text citations to avoid plagiarism.



Tuesday, March 26, 2013

Annotated Bibliography (Source Three)


Brown, Veda. "Guiding The Influence Of Hip-Hop Music On Middle-School Students' Feelings, Thinking, And Behaving." Negro Educational Review, The 57.1-2 (2006): 49-68. ERIC. Web. 25 Mar. 2013.

The article discusses how hip hop music affects middle-school students’ psychological being and how teachers can use the consumption of hip hop to help in the academic field as well as in the classroom. Brown talks about how adolescents follow trends introduced through music and shows how they are greatly influenced by this music. She asks questions as to why they are so easily influenced by the music industry and why they are targeted for this type of market. She goes into detail about what exactly about the music appeals to these students and what emotions or behaviors this evokes. They hope to take these same types of appeal from music and implement them in the classroom setting.
Veda Brown breaks down her research into a couple points. She wants to explore how motivational music is to the middle school students, how the music appeals to them (ie. marketing strategies), and how the teachers and parents of these students can use these strategies to make learning appealing to students. She wants to see how meaningless lyrics and catchy beats affect the students’ behavior in the way they approach subjects or scenarios and why they take to them. Most of the middle school children listen to hip hop or just music in general to evoke emotion or as a form of release to life’s problems.
This article will help me in my inquiry paper because it focuses on the mind of students and how it affects their behavior and psychological status. It also focuses on a specific group of students; I’m not sure of what ethnic group but I am assuming African American students because they mention hip hop. I am using the information found in this article to prove or to illustrate how music and the how the rhetoric in music can change or significantly affect a student in the academic field and why this happens.
·       “Adolescents' attitudes about school, material success, appreciation of themselves and others seem to be shaped to a large extent by the music they listen to” (49).
·       “Well meaning adults have often complained that the popular music of today seems to have a detrimental effect on children's thought and subsequent behavioral patterns. Particularly, many adults believe that the lyrics of some celebrated musical artists such as Fifty-Cent, Nelly, Foxy Brown, Marilyn Manson, Lil' Kim, and Eminem have often undercut the very attributes, skills, and values of emotional intelligence that form the basis for pro-social behavior”(51).
·       “In contrast, children who lack pro-social skills associated with stable emotional intelligence tend to be easily influenced by various environmental factors such as peers and media. Some adults believe that this emotional weakness in children may leave them vulnerable to ideas of violence, sexual promiscuity, and other forms of anti-social behavior that are often portrayed in some popular hip-hop songs and videos”(51).

Sunday, March 24, 2013

Annotated Bibliography (Source Two)


(ED) Regional Educational Laboratory Southeast, et al. "Reducing Stereotype Threat In Classrooms: A Review Of Social-Psychological Intervention Studies On Improving The Achievement Of Black Students. Issues & Answers. REL 2009-076." Regional Educational Laboratory Southeast (2009): ERIC. Web. 24 Mar. 2013.

In this report, the authors discuss the threat that stereotypes have on Black students and how these stereotypes affect their intellectual ability in school. They have conducted research and have come up with strategies to reduce this threat as well as narrow the achievement gap between White and Black students. Some students feel that because a stereotype says that they perform lower than the nonminority students, they have a fear of failing and living up to that stereotype. This report is trying to fix this issue by introducing social psychological interventions to reduce stereotype threat while increasing Black students’ academic ability.
Most minority students, especially Black students are aware of the stereotypes of their culture, so in knowing that they may not be able perform to the best of their ability because they will have that pressure on them not to support that stereotype. With all this pressure on the students, it can take a toll on their performance in the classroom. The authors and researchers are conducting studies that will find ways to reduce the stress of negatively reinforced stereotypes. Since the Black racial group faces many negative stereotypes already, it is hard to not focus on those while trying to perform at the best of their ability along side of the rest of society reinforcing them as well.
I chose this report because this tells about stereotypes presented in the classroom of Black students. I need to know how these minority students are viewed before I can assess how other factors play into why they are viewed this way. There are charts and other forms of data that will help support my claim or answer my question.
·       “Stereotype threat arises from a fear among members of a group of reinforcing negative stereotypes about the intellectual ability of the group” (1).
·       “In a society where economic opportunity depends heavily on scholastic success, even a partial narrowing of the achievement gap would lead to a positive change in the lives of academically at-risk children” (1).
·       “It was hypothesized that Black students in this condition would worry that performing poorly could confirm a stereotype about their racial group’s intellectual ability” (2).

Annotated Bibliography (Source One)


Works Cited
Lee, Sharon. “The Effects Of Music On Student Psychology.” Online Submission (2011): ERIC Web. 24 Mar. 2013.
In this article, the author is explaining how music affects us as we go about our daily lives. Music is an important part of our culture and it can influence some of the decisions that make regarding our everyday routines, especially those of students in school. The author argues that the different types of music can cause different reactions in students whether they are good or bad. She also argues that the music can be beneficial to a student as well as distracting when trying to complete tasks. Throughout the article, Lee gives examples of studies where music is introduced in the classrooms and analyzed the results of students’ performance with music.
Sharon Lee conducts several tests and analyzes the physical, social, and psychological effects of music on students in school. She is trying to get the reader to understand the technical processes that happen within the body that allows a person, a student in this case, to act a certain way under the influence of music. I am looking for research in which I find out whether the lyrical content as well as the beat of the music contributes to the performance of a student in school especially in African American students. Lee discusses how the psychological processes are mostly affected because of how the music manipulates their mood. And once the mood is altered then one’s actions or course of action may change. Sometimes we cannot even control the
I will use this source to lay the foundation of my research. I will first find out how music affects the body and the mind before I find out how it can influence a student to do something that a stereotype suggests. This article goes into detail about brain waves and  arousal levels that give me a bit of background knowledge that will help me better understand how music really affects adolescents in school. The article tells me about music and psychological processes that are being affected by music especially in our culture and society today.
·       “In an 1991 article, Giles states that ‘Intervention programs for children at risk could use music to help them relax, build their self-esteem, and help them with their emotional problems’” (3).
·       “Adolescents naturally seem to use music to monitor and manipulate mood, motivation, and task completion, but understanding the effects of music could enable them to make appropriate decision” (1).
·       “Also important are the effects of music we do not choose, but are subjected through our environment choices such as restaurants and stores” (1).


Saturday, March 23, 2013

Dialogic Journals (Article One)

“The Effects of Music on Student Psychology”  By Sharon Lee

I hope that this article talks about how students in general are affected by music. I am looking for something that specifies the effect on African-American students and how this plays a role in their actual lives.

“Adolescents naturally seem to use music to monitor and manipulate mood, motivation, and task completion, but understanding the effects of music could enable them to make appropriate decisions concerning musical choices.” (1)
This quote is going to set a basis of why they listen to music and how it affects their actions and their decision-making.
“Also important are the effects of music we do not choose, but are subjected to through our environment choices such as restaurants and stores.” (1)
This tells me about how music in our surroundings may not be controllable to us but can have some effect on our minds.
“In a culture where music is constantly playing all around us, it is important for parents, students, and teachers to understand how music may help or hinder us in the completion of our tasks.” (2)
This quote is getting me somewhere; it talks about our culture and music but it doesn’t specify which culture. But it does tell me about actions in result of music.
“Can it help students study more effectively, or does it distract from the completion of homework?” (2)
This starts to get into what I am inquiring about. It gets into the effects of stereotypes about music affecting African American education.
“An alternate theory suggests that music may simply help people focus their attention and ignore noise or other novel distractions in the environment.” (3)
Music is not always a distraction to people as most stereotypes suggests.
“In a 1991 article, Giles states that “Intervention programs for children at risk could use music to help them, build their self-esteem, and help them deal with their emotional problems.” (3)
These “children at risk” could be referring to African American children in school or outside of school. Music may be a release for them.
Two-thirds of the students said they listened to or performed music for personal enjoyment, expression, and to release or control negative emotions. They agreed that relating to the lyrics, whether writing, singing, or listening, let them know they were not alone, and helped them cope with difficult times in their lives.”(4)
Not all music that the students listen to affect them negatively as some stereotypes suggest. Some music provides a release for students who are going through personal experiences.
Clearly, some musically inclined adolescents understand the power of music based on their own experiences, but various types of music can have different effects on how people function in certain situations.”(4)
I agree with this quote as a whole because certain types of music can trigger different emotions which can cause various reactions in a student. It may be good or bad, it all depends on the person.

Sunday, March 17, 2013

"Explorartory Essay (2nd Draft)" Reflection

1. What was the most helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.
The most helpful piece of advice that Megan gave me was when she asked me to present more questions about the articles and show how the ideas presented in these articles relate to college preparation. I thought that I did a good job of explaining my points but she is pushing me to look deeper in the texts and find more connections and hidden things that the author may not blatantly put out there.

2. What was the least helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.
I would not say that there was a least helpful piece of advice because all criticism that she gives me can benefit me and my writing in some way. The least stressing piece of advice or commentary that Megan gave me was correcting grammar and punctuation. I also forgot about my Works Cited page so I will need to add that into my paper.

3. What questions do you have about Megan’s comments?
At the beginning of my paper she said that I need to avoid using second person, but I am not sure how to word what I am saying because I thought that I was speaking to an audience so I may need some guidance on that. Another question I have is about punctuation and grammar. How am I supposed to place quotes or textual evidence? I thought that the period is included in the quote because that was the end of the sentence. Another quote I used, you said that the B should be lowercase because it was two sentences on either side of the comma. I was quoting from the text so I don't understand why the B should be lowercase.

4. What are your plans for revision? Be specific. 
 I will fix minor grammatical errors, include a Works Cited page, and dig deeper into what the authors are trying to convey in their works. I will find evidence in the text to support my thesis. I will also try to leave my opinion out of the paper and implement the authors point of view.

Monday, March 11, 2013

Conference Reflection (3/11/13)

I really enjoyed the conference especially because I got to hear opinions and input from other students not in my inquiry group. When I first got there, I was thinking about my research paper in one way and after having the conference with Meagan and three other peers, I am thinking about my inquiry paper in another way that will help me find out what I want to focus on in the paper. I was going to talk about how perceptions, identities, and stereotypes of students (minorities) are represented in pop culture and how this affects them in school. I realized that after discussing in the group conference, I was able to come up with a specific topic or question that I was going to research and talk about in my inquiry paper: How do stereotypes in music and movies affect African American students in education in real life?


Research Proposal

Dear Meagan,

            I am writing this letter to let you know that I will inquire about the how perceptions, identities, and stereotypes of students (minority or not) are represented in pop culture and how it effects them in school. I am interested in this topic because pop culture (film, music, social media, politics, television, etc.) has a great influence on the youth and I was wondering if that effects how the students are viewed in society and how well they do in school. I listen to a lot of music as a student and different music has different effects on me. So music gives me motivation to type a paper while other music gives me ideas and inspiration to get me out of writer’s block. I also watch a lot of movies that have school scenes or that are centered around education for minority students and they portray them in ways that may be true to the real world or just as how society sees them.
            I plan on starting this process by analyzing each component of pop culture (movies, music, and politics) and find examples of how society views the student and how they use that point of view to influence the media and I will illustrate how the media affects the students in school. I will use sources that are current and that everyone is familiar with. When I use music as an example, I will look at how the artists use lyrics in their song to show how they view education and they portray it to their youth listeners. In movies, they mostly show minority students having a hard time in school and show how they improve their education throughout the movie so it is not always a negative impact on students in school.

Monday, March 4, 2013

Exploratory Essay Reflection

As I was writing this essay, I was more focused on getting my point across with using details and just getting out of that traditional style of writing that I was accustomed to in high school. I organized my paper with an outline and I found examples in each of my texts to support my thesis. I feel that I achieved at least one of my goals in which got my point across but I still wrote in the traditional writing style of high school. My essay in a sense had an introduction/thesis, a body, and a conclusion.
I feel like I would have done a lot better on my first draft if I had used my time wisely during the weekend instead of writing it early the morning it was due. My thoughts and thinking processes felt rushed and I struggled to get ideas. I had writer's block in my first paragraph; I wasn't able to think straight and clear about what I was going to synthesize. However, I did benefit from the in-class workshops because I got the chance to hear opinions and critiques from my colleagues and received feedback that will help me improve my paper. With the extra time I had to plan my points that I was going to discuss in my essay, I was able to think more about what the author is implying instead of rushing and inserting my own opinion.I automatically notice that my writing is very consistent. Even though I tried to change my style of writing (introduction/thesis, body, conclusion), I still recognize that i go back to this tradtional sense the I grew up with. I really benefited ftom the responses from my peers. They helped me look at my paperfrom a different aspect. I was able to see what I bneed to change as far as structure and grammar.I think I  contributed to to my paper's sucess because I was willing to change and be so content with my writing. I was able to take criticism and push myself further in my writing.I learned that I am a good wrier, I just have trouble getting my thoughts onto paper. I can brainstrom and draft and outline all I want but it will take some time to put it all together. I think the hardest part about writing this paper is trying to get out the standard introduction, body , and conclusion structure of writing. The easiet part was fixing little grammar issues that were minor.I am proud of the fact that I can dig deeper into what the author was thinking to convey my thesis. I provided more examples and quotes that showed what the author was actually thinking.

Exploratory Essay Second Draft


If you have the right tools and preparation, then you can make it in this society. The authors in the following texts: “Social Class and the Hidden Curriculum of Work”, “In the Basement of the Ivory Tower”, and “Working Class Chicas” all believe that if you decide to pursue post-secondary education that you should be well prepared for what is to come and if you are not prepared then it will be hard for you to succeed.

In these stories, the authors put emphasis on the college preparation and the lack thereof. In “Working Class Chicas”, Julie Bettie illustrates that the counselors have failed the minority females by assigning them the easy classes they need to pass to graduate but not enrolling them in classes that may challenge them past high school like the college prep courses. One of the girls responds to why she was not prepared for college, “The counselor told me to take all the non-required classes. Now I’m way behind in English and math, so that is why I can’t go to a state school.”(Bettie, 77) How can you expect to get into college and the people who are supposed to be helping you are not doing their job? Bettie shows that some minority students need assistance in preparing for college. She also stated that most students are pressured in to attend college because it leads to success, “But given that school culture equates success with college is readily understood as an individual failure, las chicas were often left with no one to blame but themselves.” (Bettie, 79) How can you blame the students for not being prepared for college, if the teachers are a key role in preparing students for the next level? It is understood that if a student is not taking any initiative in to bettering themselves as far as education and getting into college, but it is also with the help of the instructor to give some guidance.

Similar to, “In the Basement of the Ivory Tower”, the woman in her 40s was not capable of comprehending the processes of modern society. She was enrolled in a college course but was not able to keep up with the requirements of the class, “She simply was not qualified for college…For I, … am the one who ultimately delivers the news to those unfit for college: they lack the most-basic skills and have no sense of the volume of work required; they are in some cases barely literate;…They are not ready for high school, some of them, much less for college.” (Professor X, 3-4) The professor tries to help her with her paper but she is incapable of understanding the concepts. Since she is an older student, she may not be up-to-date and current on the ways of modern society or she may have forgotten how to write a paper correctly. The author suggests that if you are going to go to college, you need to able to keep up with the classes or take classes as prerequisites to refresh your memory.

 However, in “The Basement of the Ivory Tower”, the professor unlike some other teachers agrees to work with the student on their deficits, “I had responsibilities to the rest of my students, so only when the class ended could I sit with her and work on some of the basics. It didn’t go well. She wasn’t absorbing anything. The wall had gone up, the wall known to every teacher at every level: the wall of defeat and hopelessness and humiliation, the wall that is an impenetrable barrier to learning.” (Professor X, 1) Not all teachers allow their students to fail, so actually some teachers care about the success of their students. Now since, the emphasis on college prep if so apparent it takes responsibility from the teacher as a means of resource and from the student as an output, whether you are in college or not. In the article, “Social Class and the Hidden Curriculum of Work”, the author implies that based on what social class you are associated with, the education you receive and how you receive it plays a role in how prepared you are for college or post-secondary education. The author discusses the differences in the education by social class, “The foregoing analysis of differences in schoolwork in contrasting social class contexts suggests the following conclusion: the “hidden curriculum” of school work is tacit preparation for relating to the process of production in a particular way.”(Anyon, 10) Jean Anyon argues that the way the students are taught influences how well they are prepared for future college plans or careers. The students of the middle class are taught by the book, they engage in work by doing things step-by-step. They are not required to express a lot of creativity. With this teaching style in mind, they are being prepared for schools and/or jobs that deal with problem solving which requires a basic background in the core subjects. In contrast, not every job requires these skills and some require more skills which require more education meaning more time in college. Bettie supports this claim, “But no one actually speaks to the fact of changing labor and declining wages that await this generation of students, a problem that neither schools, parents, nor girls can solve.” (Bettie, 82) She claims that in society the demands for education and to get jobs are becoming harder and that there is no real solution for all of these issues.

 The authors of these three texts all illustrate how you must be prepared for college in order to succeed and they also showed if you don’t have the background knowledge, then you are going to struggle. The woman who was in her 40s in, “In the Basement of the Ivory Tower” was struggling even when she didn’t think she was. She had a lack of preparation which caused her to be behind in her studies just like the girls in “Working Class Chicas” who were not prepared for school or careers beyond high school.