Exploration Essay Workshop Reflection

     As I was getting feedback from the members of my group, they really helped me to better my essay or to look at it from a different perspective. Rachel critiqued me on my grammar. She advised me to put the titles of the articles I was using in quotations and evidence or quotes from the text in quotations as well. Kayla told me to include a Works Cited page to avoid plagiarism and in order to cite the readings that I included in my paper. Brian suggested that I make an argument, try to start a conversation between the authors' thoughts, and use quotes from the text in which the author says these things. 

     I think the most helpful piece of advice would be from Brian when he told me I should really elaborate and think critically about what the author is trying to say through these stories. It seems like I am still intertwining my opinion in the essay but I have to find more examples that deal with the author's voice instead of my own.

     I don't think that any of the feedback that I received in the workshop was "least" helpful. Anything that would improve my paper is welcome. I think that the least important or least pressing issue that was pointed out in my paper would be the grammar issues that Rachel pointed out but those can be easily fixed.

     I plan to change my paper in several ways. I need to stray away from writing the traditional way. I want to start writing without a set structure and when I am finished talking about my points, I need to practice just ending at that. Next, I will try to make an argument or do a better job at showing the different perspectives of the authors on the same issue. I also will need to correct my grammar in certain places and cite my sources in the correct way and include a Works Cited pages to let the reader know what texts I used to support my claim.